My thoughts

I liked the ambient opening. The industrial was cut short, as I have read in your responses, by your rush to get something out there, and I respect that.
I strongly suggest some bass tones for the indutrial portion to give it more body, as well as the guitar which you are hoping to integrate.
I do believe the ambience should return in the song, so it'd flow like this: ambience-industrial-guitar (bring everything to a really heavy point)-ambience, guitar, industrial.
In any case, I see a LOT of potential and the beauty in this loop that is barely over a minute. I look forward to hearing the final product :3

Not bad

I like it, but I have some constructive critisism. I'd say try smoothing out the distortion, maybe throw a compressor on there and also like a few others have said, it's a bit too short. Also some base would do this a lot of good. Other than that the beat is sound. Keep at it ^^

Not enough there

The bulk of it just some droning synths, did pick up a bit at the end but too little too late. And it's too short.

Good MAN! But I would change a few things.

At around 20 seconds...I was hoping to hear a BOM BOM BOM BOM bass beat sound you know...and makes it progressively louder...guitar...doesn't really fit in with this techno tune, but if you can make it work...you just as tallented as the Gorilaz ( and i mean that in a good way! Cause I think the Gorillaz rock!)

It also ends kinda short...crank this CRUNK UP Fo-Shizzle My Nizzle!

This track sounds kinda scary...perfect for Halloween Flashes!

Keep it up man...try my advice.

Uhh

Try to layer slayer a couple of times to beef it up, slightly detune each layer, and then use your dampering and velocity knobs to strengthen the chugs up.