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Not asking for help but just for some advice on my premise:
A man comes to an open mic poetry slam at a cafe to watch and enjoy only to see a woman who catches everyone’s eyes with her attire and voice when reading.
I’m still ironing it out but I would like some feedback on the premise (plus I’m just bored and want to start a discussion lol)
Well... Can't give advice not knowing what you are planning at all to do with it. Romance? Horror? Murder mystery? 10 books epic fantasy?
"Please don't tap on the glass. Penguins can see and hear you alright. They just don't care."
At 11/23/24 11:12 AM, Remi-le-Oduen wrote:Well... Can't give advice not knowing what you are planning at all to do with it. Romance? Horror? Murder mystery? 10 books epic fantasy?
romance
But in a way it’s also tragic with it being about her leaving the event before he gets to even talk to her.
It’s kinda personal experience
about that one person you desperately want to talk too and see again only for them to leave and never see them again
At 11/23/24 01:05 PM, Caniac77 wrote:But in a way it’s also tragic with it being about her leaving the event before he gets to even talk to her.
It’s kinda personal experience
about that one person you desperately want to talk too and see again only for them to leave and never see them again
That's kind of a difficult task to pull off a satisfactory story with this ending. I mean, if I as a reader reach the ending where that person leaves and nothing happened, I can't help but be frustrated. "Is that it? Is that all there is?" You need to make sure that this will not be the only emotion the reader will feel.
"Please don't tap on the glass. Penguins can see and hear you alright. They just don't care."
At 11/23/24 02:41 PM, Remi-le-Oduen wrote:At 11/23/24 01:05 PM, Caniac77 wrote:But in a way it’s also tragic with it being about her leaving the event before he gets to even talk to her.
It’s kinda personal experience
about that one person you desperately want to talk too and see again only for them to leave and never see them again
That's kind of a difficult task to pull off a satisfactory story with this ending. I mean, if I as a reader reach the ending where that person leaves and nothing happened, I can't help but be frustrated. "Is that it? Is that all there is?" You need to make sure that this will not be the only emotion the reader will feel.
Man this gives me a better perspective on it now
I thought if I put my own bad experience with a spin to it I can make people feel how it felt but that’s not how it works.
thank you for the solid advice
Romance, but with a moral in the narrative. Side stories within the story make it ten times better if well put.
Like in Good Will Hunting. Many characters use side stories to make jokes or to add a layer of comprehension.
But don't over do it. Cuz it get lame really fast. It need to be reactive and active.
Like it belong in the main story.
In your case, you can use existing poems and home made poems to make associations and
surprises. Like naming famous, less famous poetry writers. So it can feel fleshed out and like a set
up for the best part.
And then go full original to welcome new things.
To me, romance and smart always come in pairs.
ZombieGhost
