Looks Promising
Well, what you showed us, it looks promising, but there are some glaring issues that are EASY fixes, but dragged your score from me down.
1) Their faces. Please makes their lines darker. As-is I can't make their noses out at all, or mouths or any other line that may be there. I can see there is a nose, but it's so feint it can easily be missed. They look like blank, white faces.
2) Compress the sound. This should not be so large. It's WAAAY too big. COmpressing sound is a few clicks of a button and it's done. Please do it not only when you replace thi smovie with the fixed version, but also in your full-length feature.
I stress again this looks good. I want to see it finished, bu tyou've got to fix these things first.
2/5