it was good
all it needs is music, and you spelling bitch right...
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First flash ever. Sorry for no music....I thought that for a first try I could just show how my animation works.
TaraGraphika responds:
No man, Strawberry clock, spells Bicth Right~~=D
You mess what he says....you mess with the best.....clock.=P
I write long reviews
Nice work for your first flash animation. Coloring and character designs were ok nothing to detail which is good.
Some things that you need to look into for the future.
Perceptive and camera angles.
- You do alot of good work with perspective but alot of the fighting was done with overly used close up shots.
Although there's no scenery, not having ANY background at all gives you no boundaries so make those guys fight all over the place not just in plain view. Keep me guessing.
Last thing with the fbf you need better transitions. You have to add more transitions to your characters when moving them across the screen at that speed or else it'll be hard to follow and just be incomprehensible. I litterally had to go through it more than once to see every bit of the fight and still felt lost with the random choreograph.
- You showed me you have a good sense of humor at the end which is great for changing the mood in a "fighting" animation but with any mood you need good timing. The ending joke seemed to ironically go faster then the fight did. I'm not sure if it was suppose to be funny or not but i didn't laugh. So sorry about that in advance.
Music and sfx is a big part of flash! This is ok now but you have to learn how to incorporate audio with the visuals to become an even better animator!
tl:dr version
I gave you a 5/10 it's not bad but giving you anything over that would give you the impression that it's perfect. You still got stuff to work on and motivation will help. Keep up the good work hope to see more from you in the future. :]
TaraGraphika responds:
Awesome man, I write short~~
I would also agree to take this a 5, as you know if I use the excuse of me doing my first flash, you guys won't probably like it. so, I'll just say, next time, I'll keep it slow, understanable, SFX, etc.
....This is my first Flash....Will make more better ones.=)
decent
it had too little sound effects you should try ad add ome next time, other than that it was pretty good
TaraGraphika responds:
Yes, will try to add some of the sound effects, sorry and thanks!
Hrmmm
I give you a 5/5 on anmation, but a 2 for story and music. It wasn't terrible, but now that you've got such great animating talents, work on developing the piece as a whole :)
TaraGraphika responds:
Yeah, a story that I need, should be doing more storyboards...Thanks!
Sketchy but nice
The art seemed a bit messy, sketchy and confusing, but overall it wasn't bad and the ending was nice :)
TaraGraphika responds:
I will probably clean up more. Thanks~~