I didn't like it
I got bored half way through so skipped to the end. Too badly drawn. Soz.
Author Comments
chapter 3! ^^
i have already done 8 chapters so far. and the first 4 chapters will be a bit messy..i am working on chapter 9 now.. maybe i am going to add some music to that chapter... o well.. i think this chapter isn't that great..but later the story will get better
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i hope you like it ^.^
meh..
The story didn't make any sence to me, so I went and checked the the first one....than the second one and it still didn't make any sence to me XD
And having seen the previous 2, I gotta say that you did better on the others than you did with this one. The drawings looked better in the others and i didn't really see any backgrounds in this one. But the little dress-up game was nicely done.
I think you should either color each picture or spend more time on the drawings and put in more detail and backgrounds. Because your drawing style is a pretty simple manga style and styles like that can easily look cheap. And by coloring or putting more detail in it, it will make a HUGE difference.
A-Shadow-14 responds:
yes i know XD, but the first chapters are a bit old.. XD
after chapter 4 it looks better