That was great for a first animation. Nice work to both, you and your friend.
I hope you enjoy my very first animation uploaded to Newgrounds.
This was a story I tought couple years ago, when I was really depressed and gone through some bad things in my personal life.
Voice was made by a friend of mine, Beth.
Hope you enjoyed, please don't forget sharing! Thank you for supporting this creation ^_^
That was great for a first animation. Nice work to both, you and your friend.
The metaphor is somewhat clever, and I applaud your first attempt at animation, which is remarkedly better than most of the folks posting their first animations, although the metaphor is not complete. For example, I was hoping that it goes more in depth about the options or consequences of that paper ship, or perhaps offers a solution for that paper ship to recover. Still, a solid 3 out of 5! Good job :)
Thoughtful and well put together indeed, as someone said before me, but it's missing one more point: the whole point of a ship is to sail. The analogy is perfect, but missing one major step which ought to be explained: as a ship, you *want to sail*, this is something you were *born to do!* -- and yet you can't, because any further contact with water will damage you -- and you ultimately *have to* come into contact with water. It is not sufficient simply being pulled to shore; you want to set sail. If you were a bird, it is not sufficient that your clipped wings be fixed; you want to be able to take off and fly -- and you can't.
I'm glad you tackled the issue of depression; too many of us either deny it's there, or make like it's something people "get over." What I would have appreciated in this film, in addition to what you've put here, is to see *HOW* people get to that stage. Not every paper ship sinks, if that is the analogy you're making -- because not everyone goes through depression -- and as such, we need to let people know what brings about depression. It is not enough to say that so-and-so is suffering from depression; to fully understand the nature of the problem, you have to look at its roots.
Overall well done, but I would have appreciated even more muscle to the content, so to speak. Animation was simple and succint, Beth's voice was quite emphatic.
4/5.
Loved this movie. It's nice to see someone who understands the thought process that goes with depression, so i'm guessing either you or someone close to you has/had depression. From someone who suffers chronic depression and anxiety, this was a great film. Depression isn't something you can just "get over" or "get a grip" of.
Well done.
xx
Thank you BeckyBee! Did you read the description? Actually it was a short story written by me, glad you liked it, cya! :D
Thoughtful and well put together.
Thanks!