Good stuff, but
It's clearly not your best work. I think possibily that working a motif like this was too much. You went for the cheesecake of a cop drama and let loose.
You have an imaginative captivation when it comes to writting out a plot, but take my advice, and put more reality into it. 16 hours to do your job? Not bloody likely. Maybe you should have made it an "old case" that had not been solved. You had to go back to the roots of the crime, and start over or something.
Some of the voices got annoying, I admit it. If you curb the forcfulness and soften her tone, it'll make her parts great.
Every time I lost, I got more and more annoyed, to the point of looking through the reviews looking for spoilers to win.
Good luck with future games. Remember "real fiction" will work better.