Reviews for Distant Town

[Renshi]

Non-remix songs often make me make stories...

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A man trudges through a wasteland in the night, the floor covered in black, formless slush, every step he takes kicks up the slush into the air in a dust-like appearance, the stale taste of the sludge entering his mouth every so often. This place was a battleground.... one in an ancient war, war of survival. Hulks of dead vehicles lie scattered everywhere, the power sources of the ancient wepaonry having worn itself off a long time ago.
He holds up a bracer he is wearing near his mouth, pressing down onto a button, producing a beep.
"Nothing so far... Substance 26-B has degraded into its last stage everywhere, only a junkyard remains."
The bracer 'talks' back to him, another male voice... late fourties, maybe.
"Damn it... keep looking, you've only been down on the battlefield for less than a hour! If we find a intact piece of Substance 26-B we'd be loaded for who knows how long!"
"Yeah yeah, I know... these machines must've used all of the substance's energy up over the years... I would have thought it would have started to re-grow into a hot-spot for 26-B."
He then lets go of the button, letting his hands rest at his sides. A low noise to his right is heard.. something shuffling about the sludge in the distance. The man pulls out a pistol from its hoilster... This thing fired specail slugs with suspended plasma inside its shell, the bullet itself shot via magnetic coils. It'd take care of any kind of life form on this planet.
He holds his bracer up, just pressing another button, setting it on continued broadcast.
"Hey, you know anything about this planet's inhabitants? I think i've found something... too damn dark to see anything, though."
"Eh? This side of the planet has a few harmess species... not much has survived since whatever war happened here tore apart this whole side of the planet... The rest of the planet's species is on the jungle on the other side. Hell, i'm not even sure what your hearing, I'm not picking up any lifesigns besides your own up here."
1:20
"Whatever, I know I heard something..." He says, approaching the sound, turning on an addon flashlight he has on the pistol. Suddenly something with black, pulsating bulges moves and stares at him - Its face looks like it could have been some kind of humanoid, but its face is terribly malfromed, the same black stuff on it. It starts growling, making the man yelp and unload a bolt into the thing's face, practically blowing its face up from the released plasma that melted most of its face... the sound of the mini-railgun's fire travelling over the whole area, the response being hundreds of growls, close by and in the distance.
"...Whats that? I don't like the sound of that."
His bracer says, the man being frozen for a second before looking around him, the growls are comming from EVERYWHERE around him.
"... Shit, get me out of here!" He says, looking around frantily now.
"What? I'm not even picking up any lifesigns or signals from any machines! Whats going on down there?"
Some vaugely humanod, black-bulge covered thing leaps out from the darkness with a snarl, the man blowing off the things torso, sending it backwards.
"Just do it, get your sorry ass out of space and down here NOW!"
He turns and shoots at another... then another, then slides to the side when another lunges at him, shooting it when it lands on the ground..... then he gets pwnd the end.

Too lazy to put any more in it! Beside sonly 500 characters left, lol. Nice creepy music going on! Creepy music is always good.

5/5
10/10
due to no critique needed.

punk7890 responds:

!!!Thanks man!

I love reading your reviews. Any reviews like this are just awesome!

Glad you liked it as I did make it. Stay tuned for more. :)

People like you make me want to make more of this type of music.

[Kouskespeed]

....burrr

makes me feel in a tall mountain in a blizzard and find a abandoned town every blood and peoples torsos are all missing only way to survive for the night is to fight what ever is out there

punk7890 responds:

Ohhh that sounds about right. :)

Glad you liked it. :)

[Naruto700]

AWESOME!!!!

Yo punk7890,i love this new song you have dude..ITS AWESOMELY SCARY!!!!!OH and i have an new flash for this song..here's the story."In a alaska town,your name ryan cooper(not relating to need for speed)a ordinary citzen untill one day,power goes out on the entire city......somewhere nearby,a secret lab conducting experiments on human and turing them to viciously blood thirsty zombies goes terribly wrong,cages and little prisons holding these"INFECTIES" or "ZOMBIES"loses power and there on the lose.All the scientists die and they go into the town.Back town,the worst thing happens,not only power is out,but there is a horrible blizzard and its almost impossible to see!!!!Slowly without warning zombies feed onthe inocent,The police try killing them but there are too many of them and they eventually get swarmed,you ryan,realize the situation,finding shealter,you decide to look for weapons,ammo,heatlh supplies,and food.Luckily you find plenty,you find a pistol,SPAZ shotgon,and a mp5(along with ammo of course)and some supplies.You realize you wont be going out for a while....3 days later,you decide to go out.Ryan horribly sees bodies and blood all over the place,another surivior like you,jake,luckily finds you and asks for help,ryan gladly says'yes ill help you"he thanks you and you bothe move on,while walking back to the shealter,he turns on his portable radio,you both hear that the miliatary are sending help at the edge of town,for any survivors,but heres the f***** up part,you only have 10 days to reach the end of town.You start talking about and ryan and jake decides to head there and get rescued,when back at the shealter,while gatthering supplies,you hear horrible nosies outside,THEY HAVE FOLLOWED YOU,you quickly gatther your stuff and then says"if were going to get to the edge of town,he gotta kill all the zombies that get in our way,amazingly, a few mins later,you and jake killed all the zombies outside you go out,smelling the horrible odor,then thats when you begin your journyey,after getting lots of,ammo and supplies,you head towards a abanded pick up truck,lickily the keys are still inside and drive off......"This is just the begining,we have to find more weapons and supplies,and fight off against these zombies"jake agnwledges you and thats where your journey BEGINS!!!!!! WHOAH that was long,i cant explain the whole story,but the begining is what i mostly got out....ANEWAY,AWESOME NEW SONG,oh and what you think of my story punk7890!!!!!! XD

punk7890 responds:

Awesome story! I love reading these!

Thanks for the review. Glad you liked the song!

Check out my user page for more songs like this.

[DjMikoZi]

Postapocaliptic

It reminds me Fallout

[Darkwarri0r]

Creepy -music to my ears ;) And another story!

I like the way you make this kind of music, and I think I might have a little story for it.- It's the year 2050. Throughout my life I have seen much, and lost so much more.
"Beware of that which we can not see, my son". Those were the last words my father said to me before dieing on his bed, due to unknown reasons. Various of my friends died in wars, and the remaining family I have, I barely spoke to them or see them, even my mother. The only person I cared for was my wife. I shared everything with her. Somewhere in march. 2049, she went missing.. for months I searched for her, tried to locate her, yet no succes. Most people said to me that I should let it go, that she was dead.. But I refused to believe that. So on the 13th of august, I pressed on my search, all alone. I traveled across the continents, even to the frozen wastelands, but no luck.. the last continent, which she said to be disgusted of, was North-America. I don't know why, but it was something that had to do with her past.. It's been too long. Now, a year after the disappearing of my wife, and me almost out of energy, willpower and faith, I happen to stumble upon some kind of.. ruin. I take a good look around, only to see bones.. bones.. bones. It is a graveyard.. I walk further on and stumble upon a corpse with a necklace around her neck, made out of pure pearls and in the middle a big, shiny Diamond. My worst fear becomes reality as I look at the hand, a ring on a boney finger.. I carefully remove it and look into the inside.. "Married on the 24th of octobre, untill death do us part..-" The names have worn out over time due to the enviorement, the harsh wind. I am there, kneeled down by the side of my wife's corpse, full of grief and sorrow.. cry like there is no tomorrow. I try to examin the cause of the death, yet there is no visible reason, i look closer.. actually trying to dust the bones off but then I see it, it is as if the bones of my wife have been heavily clawed into. I stand up and begin my search, I enter one of the abandoned buildings and look around, big webs made by spiders hang around.. cocoons hanging around and even bodies hanging inside the webs, I go out this building and then I see what seems to be the main bar.. I walk onto the creeky-noice making steps, I get freaked out as I enter the bar... it suddenly seems to be on fire, I try to make my way to the exit, but a firewall won't let me get out. I look behind me, suddenly seeing a couple of red eyes and a tail, red fur on black skin, hooves and horns out of it's head. The massive, fearful claws are ready to attack and as I look into the eyes of the beast, it closes in on me. I close my eyes for a minute, knowing it is done..I hear the growl.. the burning of the wood.., the minute has passed, yet the beast hasn't attacked me. I open my eyes, seeing it was an illusion, I quickly head out and fall to the ground, the bones of the fallen rising up. As I curl up I can hear their ghastly noises.., I fear for my life.. then a hand touches me and I scream at the top of my lungs, yet when I open my eyes it is only that the harsh wind has blown the hand onto me.. I stand up, fearful for the next illusion.. as I stare off into the distance, It looks like the earth begins to crack open and tentacles of rotten flesh come out.. one grabs me and swings me around, then to release me and as I fly through the air, another tentacle grabs me and wants to pull me into the abyss. I close my eyes, then again opening them to realise they are illusions. I sit down, breathing heavily.. then a light sting in my neck, then a light.. and then nothing.. I gaze off into the endless void, having no hope, no chance of going back.. I float there, sit down.. to succumb to the dark thoughts that haunt me, the evil inside me consumes me slowly.. I am a prisoner of my own body.. There is no escape.. only the dire and the grave awaits in the void.

punk7890 responds:

Yay another story from you. :)

Very deep story. Very realistic and great, easy to follow.
11/10 :D

Again I hope to hear more from you. :)