Tone can change everything.
I'm not sure if you were intentionally doing a dry, dull sort of voice but what could have been a laugh riot was merely a good chuckle. I would suggest reading the lines you have and then getting the opinions of several trusted friends. Make necessary adjustments from there.
As such it was decent and I'm glad you gave credit to the original post on Bash.
that was great
i laughed so freaking hard at some points I made noises that I never thought would come out of me, especially the troll part and the mahogany wand
lol
this guy is a really bored weirdo. how else do u think he had the time to find those kind of things? still funny tho. i still laughed.
rofl
i cracked the hell up on the troll part
...LOL
His wang was in his hand. Nuff said.