Heres the opinion..
I got no problem with someone trying their hand at flash and looking for criticism...Mainly because for some reason shit leaks into the front page when its 100% worthless. The 10 seconds of this flash was actuLLY better than most stuff that gets on there.
Anyway I have no idea what you were trying to do...you should include that and mayby someone can give you pointers...Other than that what you did make was very nice.Try putting something small together and releasing it...it find have a place on NG. But i dont think your "test" is enough to get a place on the site.10 for effort though.