i really like it
still would be better in 2 or 3 parts, instead of 9 parts their just to short to get really into the story, i want to see it like that! your good but people have short attention spans, but they still need enough time to get the story thats going down, you barely give time to catch attention, voices could use a little work, but at least you can understand what they're saying, great effort and im excited to see your next moves. oh and i love your art so screw others who dissagree
i listened to your advice and chapter 10 pretty much solved all the problems u pointed out
Hmm
Even though you added a skip button a good percent will probably still want to watch the opening. The problem is, is that your openings are too long. It should just state that it's from Jaiba Productions, and it's the 6th installment in the "The Last Hour" series, you don't need to credit each episode. This one looked good, but it was also just a tad bit too short.
We will cut the intro part. we just wanted to show off a bit because we are new award winners. but we will improve
i got pissed off..
seriously i got pissed off..
at the start you were gloating and it seriously annoyed me.
i clicked skip for that (probably the best thing about this flash)
you need more then your own voice cause i couldn't tell that there was actually a conversation going on.
your voice acting needs loads of work.
animation is fine, needs more tweaking to it.
*Review Request Club*
Hey
I know you've doubt my work before, but let make show you one final movie to redeem myself. Let me show you for one last time that I do listen to my reviewers and I do respect you. I'd admit my old work wasn't all that good, and I was just learning, but after working hard for countless hours I finally bring you something i'm proud of. This is the last chapter of the season for this series. Let me tell you some improvements on the movie. THERE IS NO INTRO, NONE AT ALL. NO ANNOYING BORING INTRO. It just starts right away, it is exactly 3 minutes long. Full of intense action, better voice acting, great music that syncs with the movie. It's almost like a music video. Much better drawings and special effects and you will see that. Frame by Frame and more. I think this movie will change your mind about me, and I hope I can get back some of my old viewers who I upset. Please give this last movie a chance. If you think it is spam or crappy you can block me and never ever watch my movies again. If however you think it's acceptable, please give it a review i'd appreciate it. Please, please watch and review it. This is my last movie for the season. I can promise you it will be a vast improvement from my other movies, heck you won't even think I did it, but yeah it's all me. I'm sorry that I wasn't too nice to my reviewers. Please forgive me. I was arrogant and wrong.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202
-Jaiba
you've made better
visuals: continuing to get better with every chapter, bonus points for lip synching you made a few errors in the introduction though try and make sure the speech matches the writing
sounds: would have been just fine, but after the drawn out bit in the beginning where you stated you won the award 3 or 4 times i lost interest in watching, but the timesplitters music brought me back into it for the actual story part, which was very short and should've been longer by the way, and keep working on your voice acting it's hard to tell that there's a conversation is being carried on at times
overall: the biggest flaw in your series is how short each episode is all the other stuff is trimming just focus on making them longer, the rest will improve in time just keep at it
.:Review Request Club:.
Hey
I know you've doubt my work before, but let make show you one final movie to redeem myself. Let me show you for one last time that I do listen to my reviewers and I do respect you. I'd admit my old work wasn't all that good, and I was just learning, but after working hard for countless hours I finally bring you something i'm proud of. This is the last chapter of the season for this series. Let me tell you some improvements on the movie. THERE IS NO INTRO, NONE AT ALL. NO ANNOYING BORING INTRO. It just starts right away, it is exactly 3 minutes long. Full of intense action, better voice acting, great music that syncs with the movie. It's almost like a music video. Much better drawings and special effects and you will see that. Frame by Frame and more. I think this movie will change your mind about me, and I hope I can get back some of my old viewers who I upset. Please give this last movie a chance. If you think it is spam or crappy you can block me and never ever watch my movies again. If however you think it's acceptable, please give it a review i'd appreciate it. Please, please watch and review it. This is my last movie for the season. I can promise you it will be a vast improvement from my other movies, heck you won't even think I did it, but yeah it's all me. I'm sorry that I wasn't too nice to my reviewers. Please forgive me. I was arrogant and wrong.
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /457202
-Jaiba
Not your best.
I will put this first so hopefully you will see it. Please don't give me the copy and paste response like you do sometimes. Give me a real honest response.
Animation/Graphics - The craft in the beginning was very promising. The animation of that was very smooth and I thought I was going to be ready for an action packed movie, just to find out that it was another very short animation where the person talked for a couple of seconds, only having the mouth move.
Story - I still really haven't seen too much really. It's kind of boring and the animation itself is so short that you don't really know whats going on at all. I hope your future ones are better, but I'm sure they are since your latest one won daily first place.
Audio - The audio selection was nicely chosen, and the voices were.. alright, but they do need to be just a bit clearer in my opinion.
Overall, keep trying. You have improved more then any artist I have seen yet. Congrats on having this win Daily 5th.
C52
~ Review Request Club ~