Was great work done here with the art especially the 3D rendering
Reviews for "Rise of chaos episode 1"
Now that I think about it, there's no way this would have worked if I hadn't fixed it for you. Most of the objects on your timeline were movieclips and they would have gone out of sync when you paused for the text boxes. You still haven't figured out the difference between a graphic and a movieclip.
Anyway, I was impressed by the 3D scene of Mavericks room. I think the credits last too long, and then they froze for some reason. Try just doing a 30 second clip of the song or something instead of trying to use it all. That will also help reduce your file size. I'm interested to see Chaos in action.
Punisher33 responds:
of course. i agree with that. i probably would have had errors the works. that's the reality of it. this thing has been going up and down all day today. chaos will be well worth it when he is finally. that's why the ones that were graphics i left as graphics and the ones i changed the movie clips where the ones with texts on it. because look at the clip i leaked i learned a huge lession from that.
I thought you did try to have more of a story than some of your other work. What I didn't like was how this just seemed to go on too long. There wasn't even a single action scene! Don't get me wrong, emotional stuff it good too, but it just doesn't add up to much here. I did think the music was pretty good. I think the sprite work is alright, but it doesn't really go anywhere.
Maybe the finale with the action will make up for this. This was okay, not something I would recommend. There should have been more movement and better written text. I can see how you were influenced by SMBZ for this. Alvin-Earthworom was actually inspired by Kirbopher's TTA series.
Punisher33 responds:
This is going to slowly lead up to the action scenes sense it's going to be explaining origins. not much action right away. it builds up to it. trust me. episode 2 is gonna be crazy insane. and very involved.
One day you could be pretty good at this kind of stuff. Keep on experimenting and exploring for different techniques within whatever program you used for this and use the best stuff for you.
I gotta say this is a beginning that is much better then the beginning of a whole lot of the other spriters out there.
Also; that 3D work is exceptional.
Storywise; You've got your good guys, bad guys, and conflict, just like all tales. However, the plot seemed kind of... unpolished. As a pilot episode, it should be the "planting of the seed". But seeing all these characters from so many places already interacting and doing stuff like they know each other, the viewer thinks; "Did I miss something?".
You did say this was a beta though. And all good stories have drafts.
-Aaroca-
Good luck, man. Let me know when the next instalment is out.
Dude so far I have been reading your story line and you really need to work on errors.
So far there are 5 errors.
1.Grammar: you really need to work on spacing and Capital letters and spelling ok?
2. Art: You need to try and make the edited characters look the same as Goku or something. You did great with Goku though.
3. Background: Try to create your own. Keep trying. Put effort.
4. Commenting: Sorry man. Try NOT to br rude and try to be nice. Ok?
5. Effort: Put what you try to make it Perfected.
Try not to displace the blames you make with criticisms otherwise you get or mistakes you make. Learn well.
Be focused on your work, and skip it if you make ANY errors.'
Kdaza26.. WORK.