Lots of Rules say not to advertise other sites, but people still do and the others do not bitch as much as many of the ass holes that post on this board do. If you don't want to look at another persons fucking site than ignore it it is much simpler to do that than it is to write a whole fucking 20 pages complaining about someone's post of a website.

Darth-Clock-Lock i liked your story. Action packed, and people like to gritt their teeth. It might make a nice cartoon if there was more chaerecter delvlopment, but for a short-short story it was pretty good.
To the rest of you guys. If they brewak the rules let the moderators deal with it. WE don't need every member here telling him he broke the rules, and we don't need screaming. If he breaks the rules he should get banned, if he doesn't oh well. But i really hate to see a nice thread ruined by people ranting about one person breaking the rules.

Thank you newbman, I agree with you.

At 12/31/04 09:27 PM, newbman wrote: Darth-Clock-Lock i liked your story. Action packed, and people like to gritt their teeth. It might make a nice cartoon if there was more chaerecter delvlopment, but for a short-short story it was pretty good.

Spank j00. =D

My link to this forum has NO rules, except the talk of hatred of others when posting to a topic or creating a topic. There is know censored words. This is one reason I think that you should join this forum. I don't want to force anyone, but I would like it if you joined.

That is all I want to say.

Here's a story i came up with right now for the new years:

Natasha turned and faced the clock. "It will be coming soon." She said to herself.
"What's coming?" Her boyfriend Nate asked her. Natasha looked at him, sitting ina lounge chair, long tan, muscular legs crossed out on the table. His tan hairy arms folded behind his head. She looked at his adult face, his dark eyes, his pointed chin covered in stubble. His shades on the bridge of his slender nose. And she knew he was looking at her aswell.
"Midnight." She answered, her voice tembeling in fear.
Nate looked down on her, eyeing her body, her breasts that seemed to stand on their own, starit at him, inviting in a way. But he ignored them. He brodened his gaze, and saw that she was wearing a t-shirt and jeans, much like his own. They weren't very formal. He moved down here body to her slender legs, and back up to her face. Those light blue eyes sparkled and enchanted him. Her long wavy blonde hair hovered her left eye and made her look extremly sexy. Nate walked over to Natasha and cuddled up behind her, and wispered into her ear.
"There's nothing to be afraid of baby. Nothing comes at midnight, exect for the new year."
"But that's what i'm afraid of, I don't know what might happend in 05." Natasha said.
"Don't be afraid, cause what ever happenes I be right there with you, every step of the way."
"Thank you, Nate, thank you for reasuring my love for you."
"Your very welcome baby, now lets sit any wait for 2005 to come around."
"I won't mind waiting, aslong as i'm with you." Then Natasha sat sown into Nates lap, and Nate rapper his arms around her, and they kissed as the ball dropped in Times Square.

i'd like your responce on my story, i know it's very short, but i felt like getting to the point. Perhaps it's detailed enough for you, and perhaps not. I tryied to detail a bit, but i could've added more. Thanks for your input, what ever it may be. Peace out, Rock on, and Happy New Years!

alright. seeing this thread is very interesting to me, i would like to join. and to inform you to the upmost whatnot; ive only read the first two pages and the last page.

id like to participate as a writer.
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heres a first chapter of my mini series:
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Part I
Chapter One

Sands crawled up Mor's sandles, his light eyes gazed at the undesirable sun. To his hazy visions, he spotted a clear pond, even palm trees infact. Spotted lizards hissed at him as he walked pass, even to his knowledge, did he know, that it was just a mystery. To his eyes, there was a pond, but to his hands that felt the crystalline waters -- the bare salty sand.

How do I get out... I need shelter. He reconsidered.

Mors was a middle aged man, his gray light eyes looked exactly like his son's. Half balding, the man wore a decrepit fixture and to himself, he was young. As each stroke he strifed, it was barely the effort. His arthritic joints gave out, holding onto his cane, he he held his position on the sand for a short time, then collapsed.

"My son, where are you my son." He muttered under his breath. His mouth opened to let out a long sad sigh, gathering the sands around, he inhaled; he coughed. It was clear to him that he will never find his forgotten son in the desert battlefield, it was clear to him that this will be his downfall.

He gazed up slightly at the sun again, that was interpenetrating through his exhausted lungs. Then he looked at his worn out cane.

Has fate let me die here instead of searching for my son?

He rose again, his enthusiasm never gave out. But his legs did. Crawling against the sandy dunes, he searched for a bedded rock for shelter; but to no avail. Then a light cloaked figure, shrouded in darkness, appeared.

"P... Please help me." Mor said, his voice flat.

"I'll do what I can, elderly one." The cloaked figure spoke, he wore no face; a shaded horse appeared in the back.

"Who are you?" Mor questioned, again his voice flat.

The man did not answer but carried the old Mor to the carriage. The sun slowly drifted as they rode across the sand dunes of Mewlastone.

thanks all for reading. you can contact me via here . i will check this thread periodically to see if anything interesting happens.

nice opening, but i don't really get why he's in the desert searching for his son, but i suspect we will know in good time. An the suspence of the misterous figure, is cliche but good. I suggest making them longer, and perhaps the old man, will find his son in a coma held in stasis by the misterious man, and some thing go on form there, or perhaps the misterous figure may be part of a ghidden race and this is a fantasy(as the man's name sugests) instead of a SciFi, i look forward to further instalmanets, thank you.

theres already nine chapters out of release. let me see..., ah. the old man doesnt introduce himself, same with the mysterious man until chapter four. its suppose to be suspenseful.

since you are here; you can further interest me in where is our 'meeting' place? is there a forum for this guild or something?

oh, and sorry i forgot to add; in any sci-fi stories ive written, they got me to lose interest in due time. im more of a blood splattering, blade clashing against metal kind of writer.

i do write sci-fi, but its only rarely. and to the ' make it longer', the longest these chapters would go would be at most 2pages.

its my mini-series. =]

At 12/31/04 09:10 PM, poisioned wrote: This is the only message board where everyone is upsesed with the Fucking rules. Lay the Fuck off. DAMN IT!

Do not repeatedly advertise! If NG users didn't like your site the first time you posted it, chances are they'll like it even less the second time around!

These rules are located www.newgrounds.com/bbs/rules.html. If you don't abide by them you won't be accepted here in the Newgrounds community. I suggest you stop annoying this club and read the rules for your own benefit.

wow it seems this place is suddenly alive. Welcome to all the people who just joined.

At 12/31/04 11:34 PM, RaitheD wrote: oh, and sorry i forgot to add; in any sci-fi stories ive written, they got me to lose interest in due time. im more of a blood splattering, blade clashing against metal kind of writer.

My kind of person then :P Sci Fi's good but nothing beats an action packed fantasy or medieval setting with blood, guts and gore :P

and happy new year every one :P

At 12/31/04 10:18 PM, newbman wrote: "Don't be afraid, cause what ever happenes I be right there with you, every step of the way."

change the "I" to I'll and that sentence is just fine. If thats supposed to be like that 'cause its meant to be the guys accent or something just ignore me

"I won't mind waiting, aslong as i'm with you." Then Natasha sat sown into Nates lap, and Nate rapper,

Im guessing rapper is wrapped?

Overall not bad could you post a bit more oit so I can get a better overall view?

At 12/31/04 10:18 PM, newbman wrote: Here's a story i came up with right now for the new years:

Hey, newbman, this sound like you are going to try and tread the murky waters of erotica here. If you do, might I suggest that you take some time to make it long and detailed, don't just talk about the sex and then maybe go and find a site which specialises in that sort of thing.

May I reccomend this site, as I have used it in the past to post some of my work on. It's not the best I've ever written, though you can find my one story on there by searching for Coop83 on there. I'd be interested to read a later draft of this, whichever way you take it.

nah, i'm not that kind of writer, though, i was going for a short romance sort of things. I know about my spelling errors, and i'm sorry for them. Yeh i could've streched it out, but I was in a hurry to get downstairs for dessert, so i stopped it.

Ahh, an army marches on it's stomach, but an author marches on his fingertips. The stomach is just for show.

At 12/31/04 10:18 PM, newbman wrote: Here's a story i came up with right now for the new years:

A few spelling mistakes, but that's acceptable since you can refine it. Other than that, not bad. Just reduce the amount of speech, more action, and it'd be killer. 7/10

it's not suppoesed to be action, can't you tell it's a romance short.

I didn't mean action by that, I mean, as in actions, movement. Make them do SOMETHING! Even if it's picking their nose, you gotta break up the talking bits a bit. Other than that it's a good romance short.

that's my main preoblem with writing, i can't last long without dialioug, it'sa hard for me. I can't picture a time like that without them talking. oh and there was plenty of action. Nate stood up and walked to Natasha, Nate sat back down and Natasha sat on his lap. Nate hugged her and they kissed is that not enough action for the small amount of words, i feel that the action-to-words ratio is pretty nice.

It's good, just placed in a messy structure, with almost all the text in one area. Try stuff like (Dude) wrapped his arms lovingly around (dudette), whispering soft words into her ear. "Stop it, you're teasting me!" (Dudette) said, giggling as her love gently kissed on the ticklish spots on her neck. He continued to act playfully like this untill he became some what more serious "I'm sorry.." he replied, before blowing a rasberry right on the surface of her skin, making her squirm with a fit of laughter. The text is broken up by a good amount of action, and it's spread out.

oh and you won't be seeing all romace from me alot. I'm a more fantasy/SciFi guy, but just as any good movie isn't complete without romance, same with most of my stories. Like my PsyGuild story(wich i am hopping somewill animate with me) is full of action, but also a slight romance between our two heros.

^Change 'all the text in one area' to 'all the speech in one area'

Damn errors of mine... -_-''

Hey, all. Happy '05 to all. I just accepted a project for an artist who needs a horror story, so I should get to that right away.

At 1/1/05 12:25 PM, Darth-Clock-Lock wrote: ^Change 'all the text in one area' to 'all the speech in one area'

Damn errors of mine... -_-''

I don't get it waht'd you do wrong? I'm comfused, oh and are you still up for animating the PsyGuild series, if not if anyone else would like to rise to the challange, you can e-mail me at
jaydognr@adelphia.net

Don't worry about it then.... I would animate for you, but I'm crap at it. I'm a writer and drawer, not a mover so to speak.

Myst, you have got to cut out the Dude/Dudette thing it's too childish. :P <Backround laughter/>
You have a good point though.

At 1/1/05 12:45 PM, Captain-T wrote: Myst, you have got to cut out the Dude/Dudette thing it's too childish. :P <Backround laughter/>
You have a good point though.

It was just showing an example. I don't use names in examples. Might get sued over copyright issues.... >_>

At 1/1/05 12:47 PM, Darth-Clock-Lock wrote:

At 1/1/05 12:45 PM, Captain-T wrote: Myst, you have got to cut out the Dude/Dudette thing it's too childish. :P <Backround laughter/>
You have a good point though.

It was just showing an example. I don't use names in examples. Might get sued over copyright issues.... >_>

I was just kidding, I'm in a weird mood, ignore me...