AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANYWAY.. for my last post, I will...
Review -Kraken-'s review of wastedwizard's review of GravTurret. And also review tiny portions of wastedwizard's review of GravTurret.
At 3/14/06 03:28 PM, -Kraken- wrote:
Just making the reviews longer doesn't mean a lot, it is the quality of the reviews, and not their quantity that matters. It is correct that writing longer reviews shows that you are willing to put more time to it and more effort, but as long as the review doesn't contain a lot, it is worth almost nothing.
Very true
About your review, it was pretty nice, but there was things which, as I said before, needs to be improved:
"I liked this game a lot and it is a bit addictive"- this is a pretty good start, summing it whole up in a short sentance at the beginning is a very good opening.
Is it? Is it really? Well, yes, I suppose it is, in some ways. If I wanted to be pernickety (and obviously I do in this instance), I'd say that 'a bit addictive' is a horrible phrase. It seems wrong to measure qualities such as fun, addictivity and such in portions. Imagine if we were to say, 'it is 3/4 addictive'. Surely it's better to say, 'it's somewhat addictive'.
I think Kraken should have considered pointing that out, for bonus _pedanticBastard_ points.
But I shall let Kraken continue and retire from such obvious pedantry.
"The graphics were decent but i felt could have been better and also maybe more levels could have been added."- Firstly, by the graphics was decent,
Sorry. Last bit of pedantry. I think you needed to use quotation marks up there. You maybe should have written, "Firstly, by, 'the graphics were decent',". I'll let you continue.
what exactly do you mean? By 'I felt it could have been a lot better' what do you think should be improved? Is the spaceship badly drawn? Are the rocks?
Examples. Nice.
Secondly, you have attached two sentances which have no relation to each other together.
very true and a good point.
About the more levels could have been added thing, it is fine.
"The start had very good graphics but was nothing to do with the game."- this is a very unclear sentance. How come the graphics in the beginning had nothing to do with the game? What do you mean by beginning? What do you mean by having something to do with the game?
Surely the phrase, 'was nothing to do with the game' is quite understandable? It's the graphics in question that could be multiple things... But I like the way you try and approach the issue of clarification. It reminds me of Colin Moock in the Flash 5 AS book.
You should clarify this sentance a bit,
good point.
do not spare words.
Crazy expression. Is it a US thing?
"Another thing you could improve is the start menu as it is a bit plain and maybe a points system for how many rocks you shoot would make it better"- Exept for once again attaching two sentances which are unrelated, this was pretty fine. However, what do you mean by a plain start menu? Is it in the graphics aspect? The content aspect?
I would have previously always assumed the sentence referred to the gfx until you brought the issue up. Remember that not everything needs to be perfect. (My bro keeps telling me so when I get overly pedantic.) Language is just for conveying ideas and ultimately if you do that, you've used the tool.
"Well this is a good start and i hope you improve it as it could make a very good game."- this is fine as an ending sentance, but I didn't quite get what you meant by 'start' in this sentance.
I find that surprising. I immediately understood (and imagined everyone would) that he means that the game does not feel 'finished' yet. I.e. the development has begun, the start of the development is good, with promising aspects to the game, but it feels as if it needs to be developed further.
About the rest of it, it is a very good closing sentance, telling him to put attention to your ideas for improvement, this is what reviewing is all about.
Is it? Is it really? Really? Is it? How many times will I ask? Really?
I agree on the quality of the closing sentence, but feel you should have mentioned that it concisely summarises and conveys his thoughts regarding the game.
It seems like you have improved your reviews since the last review of your which I have read,
Nice and positive sentence...
however, the review quality is still not around the very good zone.
...before you urge him to go further. Nice.
suggest that you read my comments and try to learn some from them and improve your reviews.
Hehe. Sounds familiar...
I give you 'B-' by Lidov scales, try to get to A.
What are Lidov scales? If this is a one-off joke, an in-joke or a random comment, fair enough. Otherwise, I think you need to explain yourself more clearly.
Furthermore, maybe quickly re-iterating what needs to be done to get an A would be nice here?
Again, just an advice, this is what I think, you may as well not accept it.
Nice caveat. But don't use the phrase, " you may as well not accept it" as there you're actively suggesting he does just that. Instead maybe, "you can choose to ignore it" would be better, offering the option, but almost implicitly suggesting he doesn't.
Overall, it was a good review of a review.
There were a few small English mistakes and in a couple of instances you lost out on _pedanticBastard_ points. Also, you didn't use the bonus word of the moment.
However, there was a lot of great feedback - good cc and positive comments - and you explained yourself thoroughly in nearly all cases.
9/10
